A NARRATIVE WRITING - FIRST DAY AT IPG

                                                           FIRST DAY AT IPG

PRE-WRITING

What?

·         First feeling and experience at IPG

Who?

·         My friend and I

Where?

·         At IPG

When?

·         Orientation week

How?

·         Able to meet and get to know many people and get encouragement from the facilitators

DRAFTING

          After getting the SPM results, I got an offer to continue studying at IPG. I remember that my first day at IPG was very clearly. I feel excited and happy. At the same time, I was very nervous because I did not know anything.

          However, my first day at IPG were memorable. At first, I was confused and lost. I did not know where to go. Then, I asked the stranger “Hello, excuse me may I know where the first year students were going to meet?”. This person was very polite and showed me the way. I walked throug some big buildings, and when I arrived I saw many student and I felt scared. I tell myself to be braver. I asked one girl “What was happening?” and we discovered that we where in the same group. Then, we introduced ourselves and she told that her name was Syahirah. We had participated in many activity guided by the facilitators. All the facilitators were very kind and sporting. After a while, I started feeling much better. The activities and facilitators helped me feel part of a team and I was began to feel that I had become as IPG student.

           After orientation week is over, we began our classes. However, all my classmates are quiet. Then, the lecturer talked for a while and then we introduce ourselves. I meet two girls and their names were Aliaa and Syuhada. Soon, we became good friends and started chatting and getting to know more about each other. Although we come from different province, we had a lot in common. We spent the rest of the day together until we had to go home. I always going to remember that day because I had the opportunity to meet more people.

          Most importantly, I met the best friends that I have ever had. Finally, I think that it is natural that on the first day at IPG we felt nervous, but often difficult experiences have a happy endings. That is why I say that my first day at IPG  was very memorable.

 

REVISION

          After getting the SPM results, I got an offer to continue studying at IPG. I remember that my first day at IPG was very clearly. I feel (felt) excited and happy. At the same time, I was very nervous because I did not know anything.

         However, my first day at IPG were (was) memorable. At first, I was confused and lost. I did not know where to go. Then, I asked the stranger “Hello, excuse me may I know where the first year students were going to meet?”. This person was very polite and showed me the way. I walked throug some big buildings, and when I arrived I saw many student (students) and I felt scared. I tell (told) myself to be braver. I asked one girl “What was happening?”and we discovered that we where in the same group. Then, we introduced ourselves and she told that her name was Syahirah. We had (have) participated in many activity (activities) guided by the facilitators. All the facilitators were very kind and sporting. After a while, I started feeling much better. The activities and facilitators helped me feel part of a team and I was began to feel that I had become as (a) IPG student.

         After orientation week is over, we began our classes. However, all my classmates are (were) quiet. Then, the lecturer talked for a while and then we introduce (introduced) ourselves. I meet two girls and their names were Aliaa and Syuhada. Soon, we became good friends and started chatting and getting to know more about each other. Although we come ( came)  from different province  (provinces), we had a lot in common. We spent the rest of the day together until we had to go home. I always going to remember that day because I had the opportunity to meet more people.

         Most importantly, I met the best friends that I have ever had. Finally, I think that it is natural that on the first day at IPG we felt nervous, but often difficult experience (experiences) have a happy endings. That is why I say that my first day at IPG  was very memorable.

EDITING

          After getting the SPM results, I got an offer to continue studying at IPG. I remember that my first day at IPG was very clearly. I felt excited and happy. At the same time, I was very nervous because I did not know anything. (anyone)

          However, my first day at IPG was memorable. At first, I was confused and lost. I did not know where to go. Then, I asked the stranger “Hello, excuse me may I know where the first year students were going to meet?”. This person was very polite and showed me the way. I walked throug (through) some big buildings, and when I arrived I saw many students and I felt scared. I told myself to be braver. I asked one girl “What was happening?” and we discovered that we where in the same group. Then, we introduced ourselves and she told that her name was Syahirah. We have participated in many activities guided by the facilitators. All the facilitators were very kind and sporting. After a while, I started feeling much better. The activities and facilitators helped me feel part of a team and I was began (beginning) to feel that I had become a IPG student.

          After orientation week is over, we began our classes. However, all my classmates were quiet. Then, the lecturer talked for a while and then we introduced ourselves. I meet (met) two girls and their names were Aliaa and Syuhada. Soon, we became good friends and started chatting and getting to know more about each other. Although we came from different provinces, we had a lot in common. We spent the rest of the day together until we had to go home. I always going to remember that day because I had the opportunity to meet more (many) people.

          Most importantly, I met the best friends that I have ever had. Finally, I think that it is natural that on the first day at IPG we felt (feel)  nervous, but often difficult experiences have a happy endings. That is why I say that my first day at IPG  was very memorable.

 

PUBLISHING

          After getting the SPM results, I got an offer to continue studying at IPG. I remember that my first day at IPG was very clearly. I felt excited and happy. At the same time, I was very nervous because I did not know anyone.

          However, my first day at IPG was memorable. At first, I was confused and lost. I did not know where to go. Then, I asked the stranger “Hello, excuse me may I know where the first year students were going to meet?”. This person was very polite and showed me the way. I walked through some big buildings, and when I arrived I saw many students and I felt scared. I told myself to be braver. I asked one girl “What was happening?” and we discovered that we where in the same group. Then, we introduced ourselves and she told that her name was Syahirah. We have participated in many activities guided by the facilitators. All the facilitators were very kind and sporting. After a while, I started feeling much better. The activities and facilitators helped me feel part of a team and I was beginning to feel that I had become a IPG student.

          After orientation week is over, we began our classes. However, all my classmates were quiet. Then, the lecturer talked for a while and then we introduced ourselves. I met two girls and their names were Aliaa and Syuhada. Soon, we became good friends and started chatting and getting to know more about each other. Although we came from different provinces, we had a lot in common. We spent the rest of the day together until we had to go home. I always going to remember that day because I had the opportunity to meet many people.

          Most importantly, I met the best friends that I have ever had. Finally, I think that it is natural that  we feel nervous on the first day at IPG, but often difficult experiences have a happy endings. That is why I say that my first day at IPG  was very memorable.