A NARRATIVE ESSAY - 'VACATION WAS MEMORABLE WITH MY BESTFRIEND

1.0 Pre-writing

‘Vacation was memorable with my bestfriend’

What?

• I went on vacation

Why?

• To release our tension before exam

Who?

• My best friend and I

Where?

• At Langkawi in Kedah

When?

• When school holiday

How?

• We just plan it a week ago

2.0 Drafting

Last week, my bestfriend and I went on vacation. Everytime before exam we usualy go on vacation but this time it is different. A week before, we were starting to plan our vacation, and we thought we should do sometime that would be fun and would be a memorable moment to us. So we decided that we were going to drive to Langkawi in Kedah. We were arrived at 9 p.m. because of jam traffic at Ipoh, Perak and we decided to stay at a hotel for a night, and the next early morning, we would start our first activity.

When the day came, we were super excited to do our first activity. In early morning, we wake up to breakfast and drive to island hopping. Actually we decide to go to island hopping because of my mom’s idea and it sounds great and amazing. When we boaded the boat and go to every place, two of us really enjoy the moment and felt very happy. We were fed the eagle, take a bath on the beach also we ride a jet ski together. After almost a day spent time at island hopping, we drive back to hotel before we going to dinner.

When we enjoy our dinner, this one guys came to us and ask “ did two of you live here” and we felt strange with this guy because we saw him at island hopping too. We thank that he followed us to anywhere. We decided to call police because we felt dangers. After finished our dinner, we held at the beach before going back to hotel. At the beach, we talk about our future and did not expecting that we just create a deep talk moment. Both of us cry because we loved each other and did not want to lose each other. The next day, we drive back to Selangor and we felt very happy with the memory that we have create together.

 3.0 Revision

 Last week, my best friend and I went on vacation. Everytime before exam we usualy (usually) go on vacation but this time it is different. A week before, we were starting to plan our vacation, and we thought we should do sometime (something) that would be fun and would be a memorable moment to us. So we decided that we were going to drive to Langkawi in Kedah. We were arrived at 9 p.m. because of jam traffic (traffic jam) at Ipoh, Perak and we decided to stay at a hotel for a night, and the next early morning, we would start our first activity.

When the day came, we were super excited to do our first activity. In early morning, we wake up to breakfast and drive to island hopping. Actually we decide to go to island hopping because of my mom’s idea while (and) it sounds great and amazing. When we boaded the boat and go to every place, two of us really enjoy the moment and felt very happy. We were fed the eagle, take a bath on the beach also (and) we ride a jet ski together. After almost a day spent time at island hopping, we drive back to hotel before we going to dinner.

When we enjoy our dinner, this one guys (guy) came to us and ask “ did two of you live here” and we felt strange with this guy because we saw him at island hopping too. We thank that he followed us to anywhere (everywhere). We decided to call police because we felt dangers. After finished our dinner, we held (stopped) at the beach before going back to hotel. At the beach, we talk about our future and did not expecting that we just create a deep talk moment. Both of us cry because we loved each other and did not want to lose each other. The next day, we drive back to Selangor and we felt very happy with the memory that we have create together.

4.0 Editing

 Last week, my best friend and I went on vacation. Everytime before exam we usually go on vacation but this time it is different. A week before, we were starting to plan our vacation, and we thought we should do something that would be fun and would be a memorable moment to us. So we decided that we were going to drive to Langkawi in Kedah. We were arrived at 9 p.m. because of traffic jam at Ipoh, Perak and we decided to stay at a hotel for a night, and the next early morning, we would start our first activity.

When the day came, we were super excited to do our first activity. In early morning, we wake up to breakfast and drive to island hopping. Actually we decide (decided) to go to island hopping because of my mom’s idea and it sounds great and amazing. When we boaded (boarded) the boat and go to every place, two of us really enjoy the moment and felt very happy. We were fed the eagle, take a bath on the beach and we ride a jet ski together. After almost a day spent time at island hopping, we drive back to hotel before we going to dinner.

When we enjoy our dinner, this one guy came to us and ask “ did two of you live here” and we felt strange with this guy because we saw him at island hopping too. We thank (thought) that he followed us to everywhere. We decided to call police because we felt dangers. After finished our dinner, we stopped at the beach before going back to hotel. At the beach, we talk about our future and did not expecting (expect) that we just create a deep talk moment. Both of us cry because we loved each other and did not want to lose each other. The next day, we drive back to Selangor and we felt very happy with the memory that we have create together.

5.0 Publishing

Last week, my best friend and I went on vacation. Everytime before exam we usually go on vacation but this time it is different. A week before, we were starting to plan our vacation, and we thought we should do something that would be fun and would be a memorable moment to us. So we decided that we were going to drive to Langkawi in Kedah. We were arrived at 9 p.m. because of traffic jam at Ipoh, Perak and we decided to stay at a hotel for a night, and the next early morning, we would start our first activity.

When the day came, we were super excited to do our first activity. In early morning we wake up to breakfast and drive to island hopping. Actually we decided to go to island hopping because of my mom’s idea and it sounds great and amazing. When we boarded the boat and go to every place, two of us really enjoy the moment and felt very happy. We were fed the eagle, take a bath on the beach and we ride a jet ski together. After almost a day spent time at island hopping, we drive back to hotel before we going to dinner.

When we enjoy our dinner, this one guy came to us and ask “ did two of you live here” and we felt strange with this guy because we saw him at island hopping too. We think that he followed us to everywhere. We decided to call police because we felt dangers. After finished our dinner, we stopped at the beach before going back to hotel. At the beach, we talk about our future and did not expect that we just create a deep talk moment. Both of us cry because we loved each other and did not want to lose each other. The next day, we drive back to Selangor and we felt very happy with the memory that we have create together.